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Richbee's avatar

Flight of the navigator waving good bye. Got a tail wind and more planes to fly over seek the sun rises. Catch a few rays of brilliance.

Dave Mead's avatar

Hi Dave, love this, it’s so clever and must take some organisation to make it work. Are you familiar with the work of Brian Bilston? His poems are sometimes presented in a similar way. D

David Kirkby's avatar

Hey Dave!

Yeah. Organisation? For sure, mate.  Unbelievable....

Man - it was so fucking hard persuading the seagull to fly in that pattern.  You don't wanna know how many chips I had to give it....

:)

Ummm - no - I haven't come across Brian Bilston. I'll go take a look!

I do some concrete poetry, just for fun. "Apple" is one I particularly enjoyed - though it was written years ago. https://davidkirkby.substack.com/p/apple

Much more recently my "Summer Solstice" poem has a word picture of a surfer getting a barrel, about half way through the poem:

https://davidkirkby.substack.com/p/summer-solstice-2024?r=471m47

Best Wishes - Dave

David Kirkby's avatar

Aha! Just replying to my own reply.

Thankyou!!! This is so funny! I came across Brian Bilston's "Needles" poem just before Christmas. I thought it was hilarious!!! I wanted to show Meg, but I couldn't remember the Poet's name, or the name of the poem - let alone where I saw it.

And when I searched "Brian Bilston" that was the first thing that came up!

hahahaha

Wow....

Dave :)

Dave Mead's avatar

I thought you’d like his stuff, we’ve seen him giving poetry readings a couple of times, a mix of the humorous and the poignant with a little bit of politics thrown in, he’s very entertaining. The poem that got the biggest laugh, I think was this one entitled ‘Frisbee’

Frisbee whizzing

through the air

above our heads

over the sand

into the water

onto the waves

out to sea.

You cried a lot that day.

Frisbee was a lovely dog.

😂

D

David Kirkby's avatar

Ha! omg...

That is funny - but also weird, because I posted a poem with a Frisbee at the beach reference earlier in the Summer just ended: https://davidkirkby.substack.com/p/catch

But no - my frisbee was not a dog! :)

Meg Morrison's avatar

Because we live in eastern Australia we only ever see sunrise over water; that evening in southern France we got the joy of sunset over the ocean.

I would also attest to often being amazed that wildlife of all sorts do tend to almost slowdown and pose for Dave’s camera. So cool.

Krspeace's avatar

Poem never met form better! 🤍

How do I decrypt the end?

David Kirkby's avatar

Thankyou!

Oh - just wash the letters down so they are all on the same line…

Best Wishes - Dave:)

Krspeace's avatar

Aaaaah, I see it now 😋

Alex Dawson's avatar

I adore the creative composition here!! So good!

David Kirkby's avatar

Thankyou, Alex :)

Rebecca Cook's avatar

HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA! Wow. This is so cool, but that part at the end?!? I think it's backwards, but being quite ass-backwards myself, I can't tell what it says.

David Kirkby's avatar

Ah! Glad you like it :)

The bit you can't decipher - it's just a normal sentence reading left to right. All I did was change the height of each letter and space them out, to simulate a wave pattern. It reads: "over the wind rippled surface"

Dave :)

Jonathan Potter's avatar

So fun!

Nazish Nasim's avatar

I love the shape of this poem, Dave! Beautiful poem.

David Kirkby's avatar

Hey, dear Naz. Thankyou! I have a commitment to myself to avoid repeating the same thing constantly. I do a lot of serious. Sometimes, it's just fun to have fun....

Best Wishes - Dave :)

Mahdi Meshkatee's avatar

Lovely, Dave! I also enjoy realizing the power of form whenever possible, and here you have done it neatly.

David Kirkby's avatar

Thankyou, friend Mahdi!

Best Wishes - Dave :)

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David Kirkby's avatar

Thankyou, friend Jeremy!

My work tends towards serious, most of the time, but sometimes it's fun just to play....

D :)